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Far away..
Somewhere I belong
I start to believe.
That they are not all gone.
Far away..
In a place I can find
I start to feel
The whole world is blind
Far away..
That somewhere so secluded
A part inside me
Feels so excluded
Far away..
I wish I was there
With the ones that I love
I wish they would care
Far away..
In an ocean so strong
The currents carry me
Away – then I’m gone
Far away…
So far away..
Don’t forget to comment!
November 25th, 2006 at 8:27 pm
4 Responses to “Far away..”
Sai,
Great poem! In this poem you so seem so distant grasping out in need of assistance. I love the way you decribed everything. Also your word choice was great. I would love to see some more of your ideas!
Novia ^^
November 25, 2006 @ 9:25 pmNovia,
Thanks so much for your input.I wrote in the point of view of one of the charachters in a book I’m reading.Comment away..
Sai:]
November 25, 2006 @ 9:33 pmVery impressive poem..your best so far..by far…I can almost hear a soft voice whispering the words…just a quick question: ‘a place so secluded that you feel excluded’ was great word play, but its a bit of an oximoron…
December 2, 2006 @ 4:00 pmAron,
Thanks for the comment.Yes, I feel this is my best one too.This poem is about two kinds of emotions, or kinds of people: the ones that feel lonely and not belonging, and the others that want to be like that, but later develop a feeling of exclusion.I’m glad that you liked the poem.Keep commenting…
Sai:]
December 2, 2006 @ 4:26 pm