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I saw a boy one day
Walking toward it like he couldn’t say
Sat beneath the evergreen tree
And said he was in love with me
He said he always knew me well
Everyday he could tell
You understand me he explained
Because I’ve never felt the sameI stood bewildered for a while
Watching away as he cried
Sat down beside him that day
And asked him why he ran away
He said he couldn’t explain why
After all he had to cry
Stupid me he proclaimed
I said you have to take the blame
Why he said with all eager eyes
Because of all your built up lies
Today beneath the evergreen tree
November 27th, 2006 at 10:10 pm
6 Responses to “The way the world works…”
I love the way you ended it so differently froom the end. It made a strong point and it really does describe how the world works. I think that the world does chanjge depending on what you do and what you say rather than who you are like how in the beginning he loved you but in the end you confronted him of his flaws like his built up lies and he got mad….and that day under an apple tree he hated you. At least I think that was one of the points of the poem ^^
November 27, 2006 @ 10:22 pmNovia,
Haha.You totally got the point.So now, when people read it, they can understand it better through your comment! I put some thought into this poem, and lo behold, that’s how I felt! Well..keep commenting..
Sai:]
November 27, 2006 @ 10:29 pmSai -
I like all of your poems; I like the way you try to keep the lines short but meaningful, I like your tactful use of repetition and color, and I like the way you turn stereotypical poetic sentiments upside-down, as in this poem. Keep up the good work!
December 1, 2006 @ 11:45 pmThanks for the comment Mr.A! I like to keep the poems short, as they allow the readers to understand it how they want to.
Sai:]
December 2, 2006 @ 4:36 pmI love how some of it rymed! It gave it a really nice touch. Also the ending got me thinking. I think that when some one rejects you it is easier to hate that person. Its easier to push them away compleatly and say that you hate them. Its a bad thing to do but if it hurts less then I can understand why someone would say it. Blew me away love it!
December 4, 2006 @ 5:31 pmTaylor
P.s. I dont hate you!
sorry spelt rhymed wrong.
happens.
December 4, 2006 @ 5:32 pmTaylor