Not many people, really. No one really knows what goes on in the minds and souls of any other person around them. People live in such a secretive way that it is very hard to figure their life story out, even if it’s to help them. That connects us to one question brought up by Anne, why are people like that? Why are they not courageous enough to behave in the same way as they do when they are with their families? The answers to these questions are many, yet depend on a person’s point of view of life. For example, a pessimist can feel people hide their feelings because they are self-centered, too worried of what the other person might do with their stories, etc. Whereas, an optimist will feel like people just need to open up to one another more, and that they are just shy.
People just don’t understand each other well. They know that they might be able to solve each others’ problems, yet, they are too worried about what others may think of them. I myself feel a bit nervous talking to someone knew, worrying if they think my fears are silly, or if I am very easily amused. Yet sometimes, I really wish those people would take some time to get to know me better. Understanding a person is a lot better than talking about how strange they are when you don’t even know them well. But yes, we all do the talking. I can say as many saintly things as I like, but what really matters is the actions that I do.
I want to talk about how girl’s feelings can be a lot different than boys’. We are a lot more sensitive and caring than the boys are, but they are understanding in their own subtle way too. I don’t know about all the other girls, but I just can’t bear to see a person sad. It just brings tears up to my eyes as well, especially if I know that person. And, if someone is sad because of me, either because we just had a fight or because he/she is mad at me for some reason, I feel a mixture of anger and sadness. At first, I am very angry. I just feel, “How could they do that?” But later, I think of my faults, and apologizing for your faults really helps end the conflict. That is the way I feel. I really hope others feel that way too, so the world could be a slightly more peaceful place. Oh, the great expectations!
There are so many things that go on in a young girl’s soul – I feel no one will ever understand. Sometimes, I just feel like trading places with all the people that don’t understand me; I want them to see what the real me is. It is quite frustrating seeing the world around you mocking you for something you are not. Why does everything work that way? Take some time, think about things, about people, about yourself, and about the situations that you or anyone else may have caused. At the moment, I feel very emotional writing this entry, as it really makes me want to scream and tear my hair out, showering the world with all the pent up emotions inside me.
Just two minutes ago I had an argument with my family. Two minutes ago. I was just so into this assignment, my fingers were constantly running across the keys of the keyboard, my thoughts matching the rhythm; when suddenly my brother comes in and demands to look at some website. I give in, because I don’t want to start an argument, and let him do what he wants to do. He was taking a very long time, and my mind was coming up with so many solutions, questions and things to write about, that I just mumble, “I was very into this assignment.” My dad then comes in, and starts telling me to let my brother use the computer and asks me to have patience and etc. etc. I feel quite upset. Why is it that no one can understand how much of an intense writer I am? I hate to be disturbed when I am in the middle of writing anything. It just tears me away from the mood. But then again, I feel it is my entire fault. I should be more patient, and not be such a whiner. Why is this world just such a complicated place to live in?
Let me not sound like I am using this blog entry to talk about all the problems I have in life. Let me use this, to show you readers, that this is what goes on in the soul of a young girl. This and much more. Never underestimate what we go through.
Sai, You are truly a very sensitive person.I for one can understand most of your fears,apprehensions and what not.You are going through this phase in your life like any other child of your age.But let me tell you, you are doing a great job!!
People just don’t understand each other well. They know that they might be able to solve each others’ problems, yet, they are too worried about what others may think of them.
While you may be right in saying that people don’t understand each other well, you are rushing to say they can solve other’s problems.I disagree, they may be able to “help” them solve the problems by objectively analysing the situation on hand.Ultimately you are the one capable of solving your own problems, once clarity of mind is restored.Every one wants to be within their zone of comfort and hence hesitate to confide everything.Call it self pride or fear of exposure still the fact remains that each individual is private.Well,there is nothing absolute in this world, so even trust can only be partial.It has to be nurtured long enough to be anywhere near absolute.Needless to say, in such a situation, understanding too can not be total.That is the beauty of the drama of human emotions.
It is quite frustrating seeing the world around you mocking you for something you are not.
I think you are just magnifying your fears.When you are sure of your self, you need not look for endorsement from others and fearing ridicule shows you are less confident.There is a saying in Sanskrit,”yadbhavam tadbhavati”.As you think, so it appears.So you must overcome such fears by contemplating on the “truth”.Once your convictions are in place, you will automatically rise above any kind of insecurities and gain confidence in self.By the way, this is the “courage” you were all discussing in your earlier entries!! The courage of conviction, I would say.
Sometimes, I just feel like trading places with all the people that don’t understand me;
Well, this is a constant refrain of practically every person who feels wronged.It is a good idea to step into others’ position and look at the situation.This indeed fosters better understanding, but tell me, in the heat of an argument can you do that? Well, it is difficult, not impossible.But if you cultivate some discipline in life, this can help in calming your mind, thereby avoiding any altercations.
I hate to be disturbed when I am in the middle of writing anything.
While I do agree that working on a computer is faster, I prefer you could collect your thoughts and “write” them down…..You will have better clarity, I feel.Arguably, there are countless works of great literature much before computer was invented!This is not put you down, but just my observation, think about it coolly.
Lastly, take a breather, have free time to observe, appreciate, and enjoy the good things in life, dont rush into anything and you will agree, this world is not as complicated as you imagined!!! It is just a paper tiger, you can vanquish easily!All of us are with you.
December 1, 2006 @ 1:49 pmSai, I absolutely agree with you when you said “No one really knows what goes on in the minds and souls of any other person around them” because even if people had to courage to talk about their feelings human beings will never get over that fear of self- concern about other peoples opinion. When you also said that “why are they not courageous enough to behave in the same way as they do when they are with their families”? I feel it is because your family knows you and your personality while your friends and classmates just know who you want to be and not the true you.
The second paragraph really speaks to me. It is saying to never to judge a character by its cover no matter how you think they dress or their likes and dislikes. My favorite sentence that you had said was “they know that they might be able to solve each others’ problems, yet, they are too worried about what others may think of them”. This really spoke to me because I understand that people are going through the same things but I don’t ask other people because I am not comfortable talking about my personal life with people I am very very close too.
I feel that boys and girls have similar feelings but have different ways of showing them. Girls I think share them with tears and with others while I feel I share them with my self in my thoughts. When you said that you can’t stand looking at sad people I feel the same way it is just that I express them differently.
On your fourth paragraph I felt that when you said you would trade lives with others because people don’t understand you I feel that everyone feels that way because in your first paragraph you mention that people are scared of expressing your feelings and if you don’t overcome this which many people don’t you will then start thinking this way. This entry that you have said is quite personal so I understood that you feel frustrated. I only wish that I have your courage.
I can see that you are a very intense writer because of this entire entry you have created. I thought that you were very mature and courageous for not making a fight between your brothers. I am sure that all girls feel this ways so thank you for giving me a very small incite of what goes on in the soul of a young girl.
Organization: I wasn’t sure how your paragraphs were organized because it is all one big topic but it is a lot better than just writing one enormous paragraph.
Voice: Your voice to me was excellent. It had you own way of expressing your thought and surly made it more interesting to read.
Ideas and Content: you had stayed on topic and had added all the necessary topics in with a bit more than the requirements.
December 2, 2006 @ 1:09 pmThank you for the comment Mrs.K. People can solve each others’ problems, by providing solutions and giving moral encouragement.If a person is in trouble, he or she looks to their friends, parents, boy/girlfriend, or even God for help.People who feel like they dont have anyone to go to, will ultimately end their lives due to lack of support.That’s where people come in.They help raise each others’ self-esteem, and give a meaning to life.
About what you said in the second paragraph, I will use the quote “don’t judge a book by its cover.”People may not be like what they seem.Just to fit into a crowd, they will pretend to be like something.So, when the others make fun of them, they are making fun of what he or she tried to become, and not of what they are.Now, that’s frustrating.
I agree, you cannot try to trade places with one another during an argument, but you can, of course, after! Later, people should just try to think about what it feels to be a teenager.Adults shouldn’t think that they have all the problems in the world.True, you have most of the problems, but we have loads too.Just try to think about what we feel sometimes, and then maybe future conflicts could be resolved.
I’m a faster typer than writer, hence I prefer typing.Writing ideas down is laborious, yet I’m not saying it’s useless.A lot of times, I write too.You may argue that the best writers wrote their stories, but hey, there are many writers, or I must say, typers, that do their writings on their computer.
These days I have learnt to observe more than just write plainly, and I write as I observe the world around me.
Sai:]
December 2, 2006 @ 2:01 pm(There are so many things that go on in a young girl’s soul – I feel no one will ever understand. Sometimes, I just feel like trading places with all the people that don’t understand me;)
Yes, everyone once in a while feels this way about others. Sometimes it is because is such situations actions speak stronger than text. We want a switch so bad though we can’t and we get so frustrated when we do not have a solution. Sometimes patience or maybe writing your feelings down on paper would be better than speaking out loud, for in writing you can really think and write what you really want to say. For this sentence, it would go very nicely under ideas/detail for it is exceptionally clear, focused, engaging with relevant, strong detail, interesting.
I want to talk about how girl’s feelings can be a lot different than boys’. We are a lot more sensitive and caring than the boys are, but they are understanding in their own subtle way too.
This is a perspective most people see through, this is probably because guys don’t want to be seen as girly or sensitive. I guess its how the world thinks or maybe it is true, because think about it. When a women and guy gets married the women has to deal with the children and go to their school and meet their teachers while the father deals with the computer and demanding boss. The women will need a sensitive and motherly side to care for the children and the father will need a tough and strong attitude to keep up with the work. However if you were to switch their places, you will see the women will grow tougher and the man will become softer. So I guess that this is mainly caused by one’s environment. I feel that this sentence is considered good under the trait voice for you are expressive, engaging, sincere and has a strong sense of audience.
At the moment, I feel very emotional writing this entry, as it really makes me want to scream and tear my hair out, showering the world with all the pent up emotions inside me.
Do you really feel this way? I think that this would fall under voice and word choice for you are expressive, engaging, sincere, you show emotion, humor, honesty, suspense for life, and you are lively, energetic-individual as fingerprints. Also you paint strong, fresh, vivid images with your descriptive word choice and they are precise and carefully chosen.
Let me not sound like I am using this blog entry to talk about all the problems I have in life. Let me use this, to show you readers, that this is what goes on in the soul of a young girl. This and much more. Never underestimate what we go through.
This is a very good line and I might even consider it to be a quote. Yes people tend to underestimate us though they still continue to say “great things come in small packages” they say this as false words however true they may be. I find this quote profound for your age now you have proven to me that even we young adults have many things to share out to the ever growing world. This quote I should say goes nicely under sentence fluency for your text contains a high degree of craftsmanship, has effective variation of sentence patterns plus it is smooth and easy to read with expression.
I congratulate you on having written such an articulate piece of writing and you will progress through your writing at a consistent pace. Glad you managed to put your feelings into words and you seem to have hit the point accurately. Keep up the good work.
Novia
December 3, 2006 @ 8:03 pmNovia, your comment itself has enlightened me, and given me a different perspective.Thank you for that.I really like how you talked about the “great things come in small packages.”It really linked to what I was, for want of a better word, talking about.Keep commenting…
Sai:]
December 3, 2006 @ 9:49 pmHey Sai! I am just so impressed! You did a wonderful jod and I do not think you have any problems with word choice, sentence fluency, and conventions. Sorry, I write so little, but i do not know what to say. Good job!
December 4, 2006 @ 8:29 pmWord Choice
You used a broad range of descriptive words to express yourself about what you really think. There is a lot of energie in your writing and while reading it I could really feel that energie.
Sentence Fluency
Generally your sentences flow naturally but it happens sometimes that you leave an word standing on itself which leaves a sentence a little harder to understand.
Conventions
You used a lot of conventions and most of them where used very clear and strong, you show a good control of conventions.
Overall you did excellent, the little mistakes happen to every one, EVEN Mr. R! Haha
Im very proud of you, keep writing, you have a thing, you can express your feelings very detailed and clear. Thats amazing for some one your age, most adults can’t do it!
Great job, your buddy, Milos
December 5, 2006 @ 7:05 pm